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Due to the development and the expansion of supermarkets many small, local markets are unable to compete. some people think that the clossing off local businesses will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The table chart shows the systems of underground
railway
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 in six different towns. As can be seen from
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, the oldest underground
railway
 is in London with quite enough
passengers
.
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,
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 the newest
railway
 is in Los Angeles with the lowest number of
passengers
. London’s
Railway
 System was opened in 1863
which
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 has 394
kilometers
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 of
route
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 and
with
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775
million
 users.
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, the system in Paris was opened almost 40 years after but has significantly more users 1191
million
, than
London
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in London
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. Tokyo is the most used system with 1927
million
passengers
 and 155
kilometers
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underground
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of underground
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route
. The three recently built undergrounds are in Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles. Washington has 126
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of
route
,
however
, with a few amount of them 144
million
 in comparison with
route
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the route
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. Meanwhile, Kyoto has the lowest
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kilometers
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kilometres
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 11 and
passengers
 45
million
 in comparison with 5 different countries. Despite on that Los Angeles is the newest underground, it has twice as much
lenght
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length
of
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route
 28,
passengers
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with passengers
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50
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million
 as well.
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