Computer games are played by all children of different nationalities. But parents think that they are not very educational and are harmful. What do you think about.? Give opinions with examples.

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is
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many environmental problems that we have to face,
while
others
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that the most issue is the
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extent
extinct
of special types of plants and animals. In my opinion, I believe that we have more serious issues ,which are more dangerous than the death of some animals.In
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I will
further
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To begin
, the
individeules
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individuals
who are
convienced
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convinced
that the earth is facing more
importent
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important
dissasters
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disasters
. They may think so for several reasons.
Firstly
, because of the rising of the
temperture
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temperature
of the earth, many people are
sufferring
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suffering
from it .
Secondly
, increasing the natural
dissasters
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disasters
disaster
in general where many humans day every year from them .
For example
,
earthquike
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earthquake
earthquakes
,
tornedo
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tornados
and
flowting
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flowing
floating
following
incidents have
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up in the past few years.
However
, other people
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that the
extenction
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extinction
of several creatures is the main problem ,
whereas
other issues can wait.
This
may be the case for them since
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are more
interstant
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interesting
interstate
in them or they are
emotionaly
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emotionally
connected with them.
Furthermore
, the bond between humans and other living beings make human have
compation
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companion
compassion
to
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weaker
creatuer
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creature
creatures
who can not defend themselves.
To conclude
, many people see
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animals and plants are the most important
creaturs
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creatures
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to look after because they feel sorry for them as they can not survive in
aggresive condetions
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aggressive conditions
.
on the other hand
, other humans see that many environmental issues are
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and it
requares
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requires
our attention to deal with them
otherwise
all living beings will suffer from natural
dissasters
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disasters
that can change the shape of life on earth if we stud and do nothing .
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