The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.

The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.
The line graph illustrates the number of units of
electricity
consumed by the British on daily basis during
summer
and
winter
,
while
the pie chart gives information about the domestic use of
electricity
in four different areas in proportions. Looking from an
overall
perspective it is readily apparent that usage of
electricity
is much higher in
Winter
than in
Summer
and towards ,nighttime it shows a slight increase in both seasons.Heating rooms and water are the main purposes of domestic power supply. In
Winter
,consumption is between 30000-50000 units of
electricity
while
it is around 10000-20000 in
Summer
.Early morning hours are considered off-peak in both seasons but during
winter
rise to 40000 units around 3 am.During the late hours( around 20-23 ) usage increases and reaches a peak of just below 50000 and 20000 in
winter
and
summer
respectively. More than half of the
electricity
is channelled to heating purposes (52.5%).Meanwhile , lighting,tv,radio group and vacuum cleaners,food mixers, and electric tools category share an equal proportion of the
electricity
supply, 15% each.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, summer, winter with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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