Doctor recommend that older people should exercise regularly. However many of them do not exercise enough. What are the cause? What can be done to encourage them to exercise?

Physicians recommend that senior citizens work out frequently, ,
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there are many older adults who do less
exercise
. There are certain factors that
this
could result in,
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there are particular means of addressing them. There are two main factors that make elderly people not have proper
exercise
.
First,
both the elderly and their families are afraid and insecure about exercising.
For example
, They did not dare to
exercise
concern about emergent conditions,
such
as falling, breathless, and balancing.
Moreover
, think that
exercise
is essential at
this
age , and
as a consequence
, eatery and their families neglect physical activity.
Secondly
, the government lacks a long-term policy to enhance the quality of life of the elderly, For
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instant, the reduction of funds to support the ageing program especially adequate
exercise
which is one of the factors that will improve their life. In terms of solving these issues, Starting from the elderly and their families should have the correct knowledge and understanding of
exercise
,
such
as knowing the benefits for what purpose. Preliminary health check from a specialist in the elders to know the contraindications and precautions to
exercise
.
In addition
, should receive a personalized
exercise
program to build confidence. The government sector should have good accessibility to elders' activities
such
as
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increasing welfare, Creating a society or
exercise
group including supporting the expenses in these parts. Ultimately, Older people do not obtain proper activity for various reasons,
however
, If the elderly issues were realized or taken action to solve seriously, It would be able to deal with the problem of irregular
exercise
in order to their quality of life in the long term.
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