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The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
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The maps illustrate how the waterfront
area
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 in Darwin changed over the 4-year period.
Overall
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, it can be seen clearly from the map that
this
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area
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 turned from
a
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an
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 industrial
area
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 to a residential one in order to be eco-friendlier to the environment in Darwin. Another notable feature is the construction of the
habour
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harbour
 near the sea which enhances the transportation in the
town
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. Looking at the map, we can see that the majority of the industrial
area
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 has been erected to make room for more trees and amenities. In the North of the map,
while
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 the industrial
area
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 has been replaced by the swimming pool, there were no alternations to the school, convention centre and lake. In the middle of the
town
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, there
were
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construction
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the construction
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 of 3 residential buildings, which
adjacent
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were adjacent
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 to the three previous ones.
In addition
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, a university was built in the West of the
town
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. With regard to access, in the sea of the
town
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, the
habour
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harbour
 was constructed.
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, there was a construction of a footpath which connected the newly-constructed
habour
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harbour
 with the main road in the West of the
town
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.Meanwhile, the footpath which encircled the
center
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centre
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 of the
town
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 witnessed no changes.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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