The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
The maps illustrate how the waterfront
area
in Darwin changed over the 4-year period.
Overall
, it can be seen clearly from the map that
this
area
turned from
a
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industrial
area
to a residential one in order to be eco-friendlier to the environment in Darwin. Another notable feature is the construction of the
habour
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harbour
near the sea which enhances the transportation in the
town
. Looking at the map, we can see that the majority of the industrial
area
has been erected to make room for more trees and amenities. In the North of the map,
while
the industrial
area
has been replaced by the swimming pool, there were no alternations to the school, convention centre and lake. In the middle of the
town
, there
were
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construction
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of 3 residential buildings, which
adjacent
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were adjacent
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to the three previous ones.
In addition
, a university was built in the West of the
town
. With regard to access, in the sea of the
town
, the
habour
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harbour
was constructed.
In addition
, there was a construction of a footpath which connected the newly-constructed
habour
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harbour
with the main road in the West of the
town
.Meanwhile, the footpath which encircled the
center
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centre
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of the
town
witnessed no changes.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, town with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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