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films and computer games which contain violance are popular.Some people believe that they have a negative effect on soceity and so should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, a debate regarding the effects of violent
entertainment
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media
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 has emerged.
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, some
people
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 argue that these
media
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 can have detrimental consequences on communities and should be forbidden. In my opinion, it is not true and there is no proven correlation between crimes and these means of
entertainment
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. In
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 essay, a brief explanation of the matter will be given. As stated above, some
people
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 believe that violent
media
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 could have negative effects. First and foremost,
games
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 and movies can influence
people
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, especially the younger ones. Given
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, youngsters could be inspired to replicate what they see on TV or the actions of characters with which they play, and if these actions are violent ones, they will start reproducing criminal actions.
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, there have been some cases of violent felonies committed by someone who enjoyed playing these kinds of video
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 and some aspects of the crimes committed, reflected what they did
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 playing.
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this
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 reason, there is a growing amount of population that advocates for a ban on violence from
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.
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, there is no evidence that crime in society is spiking
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games
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 and movies. In fact, the reason for the stated correlation with crimes is probably because these
media
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 are now so spread among the population that someone who enjoys them is already a criminal or would have committed a crime anyway.
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, playing these
games
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 could be beneficial, because many
people
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 can release their frustration through them,
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 as is done with combat sports.
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, some research suggests that consuming violent
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 products decreases the probability of committing a crime. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the possible prohibition of violence in
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. As noted previously, the possible negative effects, that are cited by the ones in favour of a ban, are either spurious correlations or exaggerations by the
people
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 who argue in favour of prohibition. Meanwhile, the benefits are backed by scientific evidence and regarding possible influences of
media
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 on children, if a child is more influenced by what he sees through a computer than what parents tell him, the issue is an educational one.
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