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Some people think that old buildings should be knocked down and give way to modern facilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #buildings #facilities
As we embrace modernisation, some populace believes in the destruction of old building structures
whereas
 others believe to have a road map for modern facilities. In my ,
opinion
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 I would like to support the
construction
 of establishing new structures rather than protecting the old ones as it will have
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greater flexibility of having luxurious life and shows the country 's development in architecture.
Firstly
, everyone wants updated technology in their day-to-day lifestyle considering busy schedules.Where
provision
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 in the infrastructure of old
building
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buildings
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 will not give us the satisfaction of living a luxurious life,
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 of
new
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building
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 with modern facilities does that.
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, IT Companies are preferably constructing new buildings with lifts, escalators,
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 in their
construction
 design which is bringing
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 luxurious lifestyle feel to their employees.
Secondly
, each country's improvement is judged by its most important architectural factors. Considering human population factors,
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 of new buildings will bring more
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 for
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young people and manufacturing companies which results in
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 of unemployment.
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, the project of constructing
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 government library after
demolition
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the demolition
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 of the older one had
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greater employment chance among the youngest architects. In conclusion, I wholeheartedly agree with destroying ancient buildings for a good cause as it will definitely
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greater
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 impact
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 the livelihood of people in society and it is one of the major reason for the nation's improvement.
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