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Some people feel that cities should allow for spaces for graffiti while others feel it should be banned. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#people #cities #spaces #graffiti
It is argued that some
people
 believe cities should allow for places for
graffiti
while
 others think it should be stopped. I think that it should be accepted because of two reasons:
human
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 right to express feelings and opinions, and its beautiful design. Nowadays, as
graffiti
 is becoming popular among big cities, there are
lot
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 of
people
 who think
this
 should be censored. It is because
graffiti
 is sending some kind of wrong information to
the
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young ages. These kinds of
arts
 are especially being made by rappers and
street
 artists, and it includes
promotion
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the promotion
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about
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of
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 drugs or alcohol. Unfortunately, it influences teenagers who live in
nearby
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a nearby
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place
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places
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as
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negatively. Teenagers are
in
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at
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 their sensitive age when they
firstly
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 learn
wrong
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the wrong
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 sides of
the
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any content.
For instance
, if young
kid
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kids
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 show pictures
included
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gun
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guns
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,
knife
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knives
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 or violence, they will see these things as normal or take
wrong
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the wrong
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 messages from
it
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them
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.
On the other hand
, every person should express their feelings and emotions
by
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appropriate
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an appropriate
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 way. By drawing
colorful
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 pictures on the
street
 buildings,
people
 tell what they feel or
who
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whom
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 they support in
artistic
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an artistic
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 way. Some
people
 find positive messages and ideas
from
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in
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 these kinds of
arts
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art
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.
Additionally
, there are knowledgeable
contents
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content
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 on the
street
 buildings, which impact positively to the community. Artists write some useful quotes by famous
people
 on
the
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graffiti
, which can be useful for kids.
Moreover
, these fancy and
colorful
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arts
 lighten
its
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their
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 surroundings. Streets with
graffiti
 are usually
colorful
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 and amazing to visit. It can be some way to take
attention
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the attention
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 of tourists
,
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 since local culture is being provided in
graffiti
. In conclusion, allowing
street
arts
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art
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 could be more efficient than it is being banned because it provides
opportunity
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an opportunity
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 to express feelings and beautiful design. Actually, it is better to express ideas with art than nothing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban art
  • vandalism
  • vibrancy
  • aesthetic
  • decline
  • creative expression
  • cultural asset
  • legal ramifications
  • marginalized groups
  • community engagement
  • ethical considerations
  • gentrification
  • zoning regulations
  • public space
  • civic responsibility
  • curated walls
  • street artists
  • social commentary
  • property rights
  • anti-graffiti coatings
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