Many people think that public libraries should only provide books and should not waste their money on expensive hi-tech media, such as software, DVDs or videos. Do you agree or disagree?

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A lot of
people
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believe that public
libraries
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are places for books exclusively and should not spend
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money
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on pricey hi-tech
media
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,
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DVDs and videos. I disagree with
this
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statement. I think
libraries
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should offer a selection of hi-tech
media
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, not just books.
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it is important that
libraries
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have internet
acces
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access
because many
people
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do not have
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internet connection in their small
village
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. İn the modern world internet is
neccessary
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necessary
for education, work and everyday life. Government should provide the
people
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with
this
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type of service. İf the library offer hi-tech
media
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, citizens can borrow it and
that is
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better than spending
money
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multiple times.
This
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is a form of
recyling
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recycling
. Having hi-tech
media
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in
libraries
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is a way of saving
money
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. Sometimes
people
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want to use a DVD for one time only and in that
case
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it is not
neccessary
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necessary
to buy. They can borrow from the library and later when they no longer
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, they can return the DVD. Nowadays DVDs and videos are not so
offen
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often
used anymore but
libraries
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can offer e-books, which is
also
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part of the recycling process. By offering e-books,
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libraries
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are helping to reduce paper waste.
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is a good advantage for both
people
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and
libraries
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. In
conclusion
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technology is ever present in our lives and
that is
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why it should be available in
libraries
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. If we will not use
this
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content several times, we can borrow
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it temporarly
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temporarly
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temporarily
temporary
. It is positive for the
enviroment
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environment
and
money
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saving.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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