More and more students are choosing to study in colleges and universities in foreign countries . Do the benefit of studying abroad outweigh the drawback ?

As we can see that more and more
number of
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students
are
traveling
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abroad for educational purposes .
Although
, some argue that there are some drawbacks to
study
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studying
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in foreign
nations
.
However
, I think that it
have
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more advantages than disadvantages . On the one hand , it is obvious that
studing
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studying
in
a foreign countries
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a foreign country
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can help
students
to be well educated
from
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the
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prestigious colleges and universities and
as a
result
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it can assist them to find
a better professions
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a better profession
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so easily and become
a
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successful
person
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people
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in their lives . One other benefit of studying abroad is ,
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student
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students
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can have
a
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contact with foreign people and
therefore
they can understand different cultures and traditions .
It is clear that
,
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most foreign colleges contain
students
from different
nations
.
Hence
spending time with
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of people in universities can assist
students
to know about many customs and cultures of different
nations
.
On the other hand
, there are some difficulties that youngsters face
while
studying in a foreign country . The major problem among them is generating money for daily life needs . We can see that if a person enters a foreign
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as
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student , the main issue they endure is having money for shelter , food and educational purposes .
For example
, in countries like the UK , oversea
students
are facing a huge crisis to find a job for earning money for living expenses .
Moreover
, sometimes
climate
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in some oversea nation can create some serious health problems for
students
.
Therefore
, it will dramatically
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the fitness of
students
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, as a result,
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as a result
they will unable to do their work or studies ; which
also
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their living .
For instance
, in
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winter months can be quite difficult
to
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students
because of dramatic
wheather
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weather
whether
variation , thereby creating some health issues.
To conclude
, it is obvious that there are some disadvantages for
students
to
educate
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abroad .
However
, I think that it
have
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more advantages like
understand
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understanding
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new cultures and enrolling
from
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prestigious colleges
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