Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a 'fat tax' is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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opinion
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government should lay
tax
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a tax
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on junk foods or
tax free
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because
huge
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the huge
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consumption of unhealthy
diet
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diets
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leading
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to
beginning
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of diseases. Nowadays, most
of
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children
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the children
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looking
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on
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purged packet
food
as a daily routine
instead
of homemade
items
. The upcoming paragraphs
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explained about impact of
tax
on unhealthy nourishment. Every year many small
as well as
large scale
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shops or companies
developing
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processed
items
to enlarge their business. Earlier in sweets and bakery shops every day will prepare sweets freshly and do marketing. But nowadays,
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to increase their business level, prepacked foods exporting to many cities
hence
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of
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enhanced
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inorder
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to preserve
food
for
long
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time.
Hence
, if government keep
tax
on those frozen
items
people
will try to avoid those products.
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most
of
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the individual
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individual
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individuals
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gradually stop eating prepacked diets. It would bring each person to choose healthier
food stuffs
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and begin to have
homemade
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diet. Nowadays most
of
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individual
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choosing
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more
on
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junk
food
because it is easy to get at
very
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cheap cost. If
it
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tax free
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then
marketing
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level of many manufacturing companies will be increased including exporting to many
country
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. Anyhow Advertising company will promote customer to buy products
for example
kinder joy which attract
the
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children by keeping toy
along with
chocolates. Most
of
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small
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kids prefer to have
atleast
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at least
twice in a week. Some
potatoe
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potato
potatoes
chips like bingo
,
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lays
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making
people
to
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buy with different flavours
hence
people
were enjoying
to eat
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eating
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.
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, if those
materia
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materials
without
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tax
people
starts to
but
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buy
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which means
marketing
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the marketing
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of supplier organisation will be high benefits. In summary, I will support
to
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the opinion that government should lay
tax
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a tax
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on prepacked
food
items
because health is
major
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a major
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concern rather than
business
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a business
the business
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.
Tax
will promote
the
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people
to maintain
their
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balanced diet.
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