Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a 'fat tax' is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
People
have different
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a different
opinion
on Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
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whether either
either
government should lay Correct determiner usage
the
tax
on junk foods or Add an article
a tax
tax free
because Add a hyphen
tax-free
huge
consumption of unhealthy Correct article usage
the huge
diet
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diets
leading
to Wrong verb form
leads
beginning
of diseases. Nowadays, most Add an article
the beginning
of
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apply
children
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the children
looking
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look
on
purged packet Change preposition
at
food
as a daily routine instead
of homemade items
. The upcoming paragraphs has
explained about impact of Change the verb form
have
tax
on unhealthy nourishment.
Every year many small as well as
large scale
shops or companies Add a hyphen
large-scale
developing
processed Wrong verb form
develop
items
to enlarge their business. Earlier in sweets and bakery shops every day will prepare sweets freshly and do marketing. But nowadays, inorder
to increase their business level, prepacked foods exporting to many cities Correct your spelling
in order
hence
usage
of Add an article
the usage
chemical
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chemically
enhanced
Add a missing verb
is enhanced
inorder
to preserve Correct your spelling
in order
food
for long
time. Change the article
a long
Hence
, if government keep tax
on those frozen items
people
will try to avoid those products. Hence
most of
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apply
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the individual
individual
gradually stop eating prepacked diets. It would bring each person to choose healthier Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
food stuffs
and begin to have Correct your spelling
foodstuffs
homemade
diet.
Nowadays most Add an article
a homemade
of
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apply
individual
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individuals
choosing
more Wrong verb form
choose
on
junk Change preposition
apply
food
because it is easy to get at very
cheap cost. If Correct article usage
a very
it
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its
tax free
Add a hyphen
tax-free
then
marketing
level of many manufacturing companies will be increased including exporting to many Correct article usage
the marketing
country
. Anyhow Advertising company will promote customer to buy products Change to a plural noun
countries
for example
kinder joy which attract the
children by keeping toy Correct article usage
apply
along with
chocolates. Most of
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apply
small
kids prefer to have Add an article
the small
atleast
twice in a week. Some Correct your spelling
at least
potatoe
chips like bingoCorrect your spelling
potato
potatoes
,
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apply
lays
making Change the verb form
lay
people
to
buy with different flavours Change the verb form
apply
hence
people
were enjoying to eat
. Change the verb form
eating
Thus
, if those materia
Correct your spelling
materials
without
Add a missing verb
are without
tax
people
starts to but
which means Correct your spelling
buy
marketing
of supplier organisation will be high benefits.
In summary, I will support Add an article
the marketing
to
the opinion that government should lay Change preposition
apply
tax
on prepacked Add an article
a tax
food
items
because health is major
concern rather than Add an article
a major
business
. Add an article
a business
the business
Tax
will promote the
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apply
people
to maintain their
balanced diet.Change the word
a
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