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The government should control the use of the internet in a country

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Numerous
people
 believe that the
internet
 should be controlled by the authorities. Other
people
 think that they will not have privacy anymore. if that will be the case. I believe that the government should control the
internet
.
This
 is because many
people
 nowadays are a victim of online
fraud
,
Furthermore
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 the government can reduce fake
news
 by a controlling capacity. I will now explain my arguments
further
 in detail in the following paragraphs. To start with online
fraud
, Many
people
 are victims of online
fraud
, and
people
 who are older are more vulnerable to becoming a victim because they have less digital knowledge.
For example
, 30% of all
people
 in The Netherlands are victims of online
fraud
.
In addition
, criminals continuously find other ways to steal money or other valuable things online. Another reason is that
,
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 there is an increase in fake
news
 on
internet
 platforms. Fake
news
 is often
spread
 by
people
 who want to
spread
 lies about a sensitive dilemma.
In addition
, numerous
people
 do not understand the difference between fake
news
 and
news
.
For instance
, fake
news
 is often
spread
 by
people
 who pretend to be real media platforms.
Therefore
, I think that fake
news
 can cause a lot of damage to our lives.
However
, I have to agree that society probably will have less privacy.
this
 despite, I believe that it is more important to protect society from online
fraud
 and the
spread
 of fake
news
.
To conclude
, the
internet
 should be controlled by the government to drop the accidents of online
fraud
 and fake
news
. Less privacy is not as much important as cyber safety.
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