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The inequality between rich and poor nations is now wider than it has ever been before. What do you think are the main causes of this difference and what do you think can be done to reduce the gap?

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In
this
 contemporary era, rich
nations
 are becoming richer and poor
nations
 are becoming poorer.
As a result
, the inequality between them is wider than before.
This
 essay believes that poor
nations
 are fully dependent on the developed
nations
 for which the
difference
 is not decreasing and
that is
 why they should try to be less dependent on the rich
countries
 in
order
 to minimize the
difference
. The least developed
countries
 seem to be relied on the developed
countries
 more often to meet up their citizens'
demand
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.
Moreover
, the residents of poorer
countries
 leave their
nations
 in
order
 to get a better lifestyle in rich
nations
.
As a result
, the poorer
nations
 lag behind in human resources. A responsible citizen is an asset to his nation. When a
country
 falls behind in its human resource it automatically starts to lag behind. There are many things which should be done in
order
 to minimize the
difference
 between poor and rich
nations
.
Firstly
, the
government
 should inspire its citizens to stay and try to take part to develop the
country
.
Secondly
, the
government
 should take measurable steps in
order
 to reduce the dependency on rich
nations
.
Furthermore
, the
government
 should come forward to increase employment opportunities which will inspire people to stay in their
country
. In conclusion, dependence on developed
countries
 and people leaving their
country
 are the main reasons for which the
difference
 is increasing and in
order
 to reduce the gap, the
government
 should take certain steps to reduce the dependency on rich
countries
 and to encourage people not to leave their
country
.
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