The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during winter and summer.

The line graph illustrates the daily required units of electricity during the summer and

winter

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seasons,

while

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the pie chart gives information about the main reasons for that usage measured by proportions.

Overall

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, it can be seen that in

winter

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the electrical consumption is higher than summer season for heating purposes. In detail, the consumption of electricity fluctuated in

winter

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from 30000 to 40000 during the day and reached a peak at 50000 units at 21:00 pm.

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, summer registered around half of the

winter

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previous rates and ranged from 18000 to 20000 units over the day.

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, there are several reasons for that use. Heating operations accounted for the highest rate at approximately twofold. Kitchen machines are the second reason that took around 17%,

whereas

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, lighting, radio and television,

as well as

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vacuum cleaner electric tools,

as well as

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a vacuum cleaner and electric ,tools share an equal percentage of that supply, 15% each.

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Feb 20, 2023

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words winter with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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