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The graph provides a visual representation of the
number
 of
magazines
which
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sold in five different countries;
France
, US, UK, Italy and
spain
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Spain
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 from 2005 to 2015. It
also
 makes
prediction
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predictions
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 about the future.
Overall
, the
number
 of
magazines
which
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apply
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sold in
France
 and
Uk
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the Uk
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 significantly declined and it predicts to continue to decrease in the future.
However
, the
number
 of
magazines
 sold in
US
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the US
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, Italy and
spain
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Spain
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 increased from 2005 to 2015, but a drop in sales is predicted for 2025.
France
 had the highest
number
 of
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the magazine
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magazine
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magazines
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 sold compared to the rest of
countries
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the countries
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. 4000
magazines
 were sold in
France
 in 2005, but
this
 figure
decline
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declined
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 in 2015 and
it
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is
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 predicted to decline
more
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apply
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further
 in 2025. The
number
 of
magazines
were
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apply
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sold in the UK was less than those
were
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apply
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sold in
France
, but it follows a similar trend
of
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in
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france
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France
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.
However
, Spain were the least
number
 of
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the magazine
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magazine
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magazines
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 sold in 2005(5000).
However
, it slightly increase and
it
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is
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expected
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is expected
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 to drop in 2025.
Similarly
,
US
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the US
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 which was the second highest
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number of magazines
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magazines
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magazine
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 sold with 32000 copies in 2005,
then
 the
number
 slightly increased to 33000 copies in 2015 and
it
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is
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expected
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is expected
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 to considerably drop in the future. Interestingly, 15000 copies were sold in Italy in 2005.
This
 was 5ooo lower than the
number
 of
magazines
 sold in 2015 (20000). It
predicted
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is predicted
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 to decrease significantly in 2025 to
reaches
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reach
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 2000.
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