The diagram shows how sugar is processed from sugar cane.

The diagram shows how sugar is processed from sugar cane.
The process diagram illustrates how
sugar
is extracted and processed from
sugar
cane.
Overall
, from the moment
sugar
plants
start growing until they are picked and processed, there are 8 stages.
Initially
,
sugar
plants
take between 12 to 18 months to grow before they are harvested
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When
plants
are grown they are harvested using special machinery or picked by hand.
Next,
sugar
plants
are crushed and juice is extracted from the
sugar
cane.
The next step is
purifying the juice by putting it into the limestone filter followed by boiling the juice in the evaporator where it is turned into syrup.
Finally
, the syrup goes through the Centrifuge where
sugar
crystals are separated from the syrup and the
sugar
is dried and cooled.
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