On a recent holiday, you lost a valuable item. Fortunately, you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter ● describe the item you lost ● explain how you lost it ● tell the insurance company what you would like them to do.

Respected Manager, I am writing
letter to inform you that, On my recent holiday trip I
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lost my Gold Bracelet. I would like to open a claim regarding
. On 4th December, I went to Goa with my family for 6 days. On the third day of my
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I went to the boating. I remember that I
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a bracelet on that day, I have a picture of that morning when I dressed up. I believe that during the boating I was
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my father was taking a video of mine. Unfortunately,
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got unlocked by itself and it
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into the water. I told the captain to stop the boat and We tried to find it. We were unable to find that. As I own
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travel insurance, I wanted to file a claim. My
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was worth $950. I bought it on my
birthday. For the proof, I have my bank credit card statement and invoice from the company.
, I am willing to provide more information about it if you need it. I hope you will understand my situation and will help me at your earliest
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. Yours sincerely, Paul
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Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear main idea and stick to that idea throughout the paragraph. Some minor redundancy was noted.
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Be sure to provide a clear request of action for the insurance company. Your closing statement should explicitly state what you expect them to do next.
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Consider varying your sentence structures to show a wider range of grammatical skills.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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