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Which subjects have more female students and which have more male students in your country? Why do you think it happens? What can be done to equal these numbers?

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 two centuries, the number of higher education has increased astronomically compared to the standards of the 18th century. These improvements have forced us to educate ourselves for achieving an opportunity for employment in our adolescence. In another way,
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gender for another
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 These sensitive issues are possible to discuss,
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 I would be delighted to create a certain solution based on my ideas and thoughts. In the first place, it would be shameful to not
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, the key differences between
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, moving us to the point of view that even if they would try their best, it is nearly impossible to switch
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 attitude.
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, as we may register from the kindergarten, how the passions splinted to the two opposite poles. Boys are interested in more technical engagement,
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 girls are looking more frequently at social and emotional activities. It had been set up even in prehistoric years
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 when males were supposed to explore, but females meant to keep the base safe for their families, taking care
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 educating their children. To balance these inequalities, I would personally recommend giving
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open space to all the children, increasing their creativity and imagination beyond daily standards. In subjects
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 gender is basically dominating the other in
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 of numbers. I personally believe that the imbalance in numbers should be seen as a negative impact but the
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 interest from the biological spectrum. We may as should give
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 more space for their creativity and imagination,
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 the absolute balance shouldn’t give for
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several reasons as people from minority groups would have
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easier access
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people from larger groups prepared and convinced to spend their time on certain subjects for their future.

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