As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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some people that entrepreneurs have to make profits and accomplish social obligations at the same time.

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, I do agree that companies are responsible for the community rather than simply

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. On the one hand, it is undeniable that businesses make money

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an important role in the government. The more money they make, the more taxes they have. These taxes can be used to spend on many social activities

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as building new schools, renovating public facilities or maintaining

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function. Another thing is that businesses which make money expand, leading to creating more jobs and larger the job market.

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, corporations should have responsibilities

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society. The first thing is, businesses must not harm the environment.

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, global warming is increasing day by day

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factory emissions, which could be eliminated if they take action immediately.

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responsible for disposing of waste by building waste treatment plants or treating exhaust fumes and waste before being discharged.

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, profits made by companies should be put back

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the community through charitable activities or financing scholarships. Taking Unilever as an example, not only

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of life for people around the world through its quality products and services

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responsibilities to the community with a lot of programmes like "P/S protects Vietnamese smile" which funding for children to go to school, "OMO builds

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for kids" brings kids in rural area

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easy access to enjoy outside activities. In conclusion, I believe that companies should place as much importance on their social responsibilities as they do on their financial objectives.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Social responsibilities
Corporate social responsibility
Ethical behavior
Societal impact
Stakeholders
Profit-driven
Public perception
Environmental sustainability
Community development
Human rights
Workplace safety
Altruism
Balanced approach
Accountability
Consumer loyalty

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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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