The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.
The line charts compare the number of local and overseas
students
enrolled in Australian universities over the
period
of years of 2001 to 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that the total number of both local and overseas
students
increased noticeably.
However
, the number of local commencing
students
was held at a relatively stable level over the whole recorded
period
. Focusing on the chart showing the data about overseas
students
, there were about 20,000 overseas
students
who chose Australian universities and about 10,000
students
who were commended in 2001. The figures had the tendency to bulge with over 80,000
students
in total counting and 40,000
students
who were commended in 2010. In the second line chart, there were 40,000 local
students
who enrolled in their local universities.
Also
, the figure increased gradually and reached the pack with 60,000
students
in 2007, and kept it at the rest of the recorded
period
.
However
, the amount of commencing
students
were fluctuating around 20,000 over that 10-year
period
.
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