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It is often said that the subjects taught in schools are too academic in orientation and that it would be more useful for children to learn about practical matters such as home management, work and interpersonal skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People believe that it is vital to incorporate practical knowledge in the curriculum of educational institutions, in comparison to what they provide to children, which is too focused on book-based information. I am in favour of
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 because it is important for minors to relate to people and develop their social skills in order to fully cope with the real world.
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To begin
 with, schools nowadays confine minors in a four-cornered classroom for at least 8 hours every day to learn various subjects mainly theory-based lessons and have less
time
 to enhance their social skills
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 people around them.
In addition
, some students come home with homework from their mathematics or science subjects, which extends their study
time
 and lose their quality
time
 with family.
For instance
, high school institutions in countries like Japan and Korea are very strict with the
time
 a student spends studying, and they even have extra classes outside their schools to
further
 review
instead
 of doing activities at home to improve their home management skills.
As a result
, their awareness towards life practicalities is compromised
due to
 a lack of knowledge outside the books.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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