All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that the vehicles which are using gas should be restricted and
instead
, electric ones should
be use
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.
This
essay will agree that electric
cars
should replace them.
Firstly
, Electric
cars
are good for
environment
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and for the second reason electric is cheaper and renewable. Since the beginning, fossil
fuels
are dealing damaging effects on our planet.The pollution that fossil fuel causes to the environment is a huge problem for the future of our world.
On the other hand
, Electric
cars
are less harmful to the environment because they produce less carbon
dioxite
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dioxide
and
more
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silent than
the
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gas one not only air pollution sound pollution is
also
lower.
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, I am living in
the
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city which is crowded and there is always
a
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traffic.
In
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home
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I want to relax but when I open the windows for fresh air, I am hearing a lot of car noises and it disturb me if there was an electric
cars
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all around there will be no dirty car noises. Fossil
fuels
are unrenewable and their price is constantly going up. Fossil
fuels
are limited sources of our world and
eventually
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they will extinct.
However
, Electricity can be
producted
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produced
and renewable there is
a
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plenty of
way
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to produce electricity.
Moreover
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a
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economic side
of
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this
problem. Because of the limited sources, eventually prices will go up and people not be able to find any
fuels
for their
cars
. Electricity always will be cheaper than fossil
fuels
. Because of the war between Russia and Ukraine
Petrol
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prices surged recently and in our country inflation goes up rapidly because of
the
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petrol if
the
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electric
cars
were used for transportation there would be less effect
to
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our economy.
To conclude
, Electric
cars
should be used if we want to build a good future for our children and
also
for ourselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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