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Many people now have the freedom to work and live anywhere because of advances in communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is no doubt that these days we've seen several improvements in the technological options in which we could converse with one another,
as well as
 in
the
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transportation forms.
While
 some
people
 believe that there is a tremendous amount of
drowbacks
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drawbacks
, I am certain that the merits outweigh the demerits. In terms of the benefits, there are many advantages which justify
this
 vital improvement. The main reason
given
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 to support
this
 claim
that
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 As any individual has the right to decide where to live,
this
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 advances in communication manners and the multiple travelling forms had served
people
 to form the lives which
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 them and their needs.
People
 with disabilities,
for instance
, can acquire the support of the government in the European Union to lead a better life and meet their potential,
whereas
 they can't do so in their countries.
In other words
, here where the transportation system and communication technology improvements played a pivotal role in providing the freedom needed to live anywhere around the globe.
However
, some
people
 believe that there are some negative points
of
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 having the liberty to live and work wherever they choose.
Firstly
, it encourages
the
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individuals to live away separately from their family members as long as travelling and communication means are available to them.
Secondly
,
people
 who live in other far nations usually lose the ability
of being
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 attended
in
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the
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social gatherings and religious events. In conclusion,
although
 there are many disadvantages
about
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 these recent developments, I wholeheartedly believe that the merits outweigh the drawbacks.
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