Rich countries often give money to poorer countries,but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is indisputable fact that wealthy

countries

Use synonyms

do not solve poverty if they are spending their

money

Use synonyms

to

Change preposition

on

show examples

poorer

countries

Use synonyms

. Other people argue to give not only financial aid

,

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

but

also

Linking Words

other ammunitions. In apropos of the argument, I completely disagree with

this

Linking Words

statement

due to

Linking Words

corruption and the nation's

policy

Use synonyms

. Many poor

countries

Use synonyms

corrupt

money

Use synonyms

because of the unpleasant personalities of the government. The government will realize that developing infrastructures and educational systems need a lot of

money

Use synonyms

,

therefore

Linking Words

they use funds for themself.

For example

Linking Words

, one of the authorities in Indonesia, uses the

money

Use synonyms

to party

instead

Linking Words

of improving technologies, resulting in an undeveloped country. Not only unimportant actions

,

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

but

also

Linking Words

unindependent because the nation will lend

money

Use synonyms

to other nations, like China

,

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

if the

money

Use synonyms

is run out. Another point to consider is the fact that

policy

Use synonyms

in poor

countries

Use synonyms

is not satisfactory. The

policy

Use synonyms

is not completely perfect, which means the population does not know well where the

money

Use synonyms

was spent. The population pay taxes to the government, and the

money

Use synonyms

is held by the wrong hands, which result in building

unnecessary

Add an article

the unnecessary

show examples

monument and does not focus on crucial buildings. To illustrate

this

Linking Words

, in my city, the main road is still broken for around 2 years even though society pays taxes every month,

whereas

Linking Words

the budget

in

Change preposition

on

show examples

the websites shows that it is extremely enormous.

To sum up

Linking Words

, wealthy nations are not capable to solve poverty issues by donating funds and individuals argue about other goods rather than financial aid. In

this

Linking Words

case, I totally disagree because of corruption and

policy

Use synonyms

by its state.