In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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period , many businesses tend to highlight their items that
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quality of what they afford to be owned .
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, the most important thing why the producer ought to assume and prove obviously products which created by them is the belief of buyer . Nowadays , people have checked carefully and
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in their mind that it is new or used and when it
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old product that couldn’t be used play an important role in businesses . On the other
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can give enough necessary information relating to problems of worrying and annoying ,
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emphasizing new products . The most popular
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trying to say that ‘it is really a new” , businesses should
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build up beliefs
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some way like putting clear details about how
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or ingredients .
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seller and user. In conclusion , unfortunately , nowadays many people have still conceived cheap is the best choice , so
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requirements which
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new are going to play a role in health development to prevent people from drawbacks of
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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