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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both this views and give your own opinion

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It is often argued that
people
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 should work in the same institution for their entire working journey since it is claimed effective to widen
workers
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' potential;
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 others think moving to other
companies
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 is a good choice to pursue
career
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 growth.
This
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 essay will elaborate on both ideas and argue in the favor of the latter. On the one hand, working in the same
companies
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 will definitely mould
workers
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' capabilities which makes some professionals advanced in the industry and their scope of responsibilities.
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, being trapped in the same organisation will tend to make some employees get stuck in their
career
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 progress. It is caused by the limitation of exploration to other roles or responsibilities. In my company, there is a dedicated admin that already working for almost 30 years. It is unarguable that she mastered her role;
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, she is unable to enlarge her
career
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 path to other roles, because in that company there is no opportunity for
workers
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 to explore other positions or roles.
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, expanding the working journey to different
companies
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 will open a lot of lucrative opportunities for
people
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 to grasp more knowledge and promotion. With numerous experiences,
workers
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 will deliberately be invested with a lot of knowledge from different company cultures, and industries,
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 have a large space to maximise their capacity. Take one of the successful entrepreneurs in Indonesia Nadiem Makarim as an example. Before he was appointed to a ministry of education and culture, he was known as a worker who built his
career
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 by moving to different institutions so many times. With those experiences, he was able to develop Gojek Indonesia which is already one of the largest tech
companies
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 in Asia;
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, President considered him to be worthy and trusted as a ministry of education that can inspire many young adults in Indonesia. In conclusion,
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people
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 can choose their own preference whether working in the same organisation or moving to other
companies
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, in my opinion, having a lot of experience working with various organisations will benefit a professional's
career
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 growth. Since, by entering new cultures, and other industries,
people
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 will be able to broaden their capacity which can bring them to always level up in their
career
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 journey.
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