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The crime nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance in technology which can help prevent and solve crime.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#crime #advance #technology
Back in the
days
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, Felonies had an increase because
some
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of it
no body
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nobody
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 could know about
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. meanwhile, In
this
 present time,
the
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cameras are
easily
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everywhere. in my opinion, I
am totally agree
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 with
this
 statement. I will explain my viewpoints in detail in the ensuing paragraph. On the one hand,
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technology
in
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 present
is play
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 a vital
rule
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for
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in
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 many things in our life.
for example
, Th governments around the world have been
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camera
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 that would be better to keep people
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 more,
for instance
, if you want to go
your
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 bank and take some of
yours
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 money from your account,
then
 some theifs attacked you, it is
easily
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 to catch them in a little time by using the
camra
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camera
 to see their face.
Moreover
. There is
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research from Oxford university
show
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that
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a decline in offence,
as
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 using
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machines
machine
 that can take a photo.
On the other hand
, In the former times it was difficult to solve any
criminal
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 in a few minutes, which had nothing like
machine
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thaht
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that
 made a
photoghraph
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photograph
. compared to
this
 time,
whereas
 the criminal can be solved in a small period.
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,
the
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robotics can make our life
easily
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 to solve some problems like catching
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guys who do bad things in a quick way.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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