Business and Money In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The given maps show an
island
before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Overall
, the
island
has been changed in a positive way to improve
quality
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of life and attracts more tourists. Regarding the first map, it is notable that there used to be a few trees, like the desert
island
with no houses, appliances or any signs of life.
However
, after a long time, it has
been
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developed into a famous tourist attraction, constructed
a
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lot of accommodations and many interesting places. In the middle of the
island
are resorts and to the left is a restaurant and a reception.
Beside
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,
connection
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the connection
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between motels is the footpath and
vehicle
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track is around the reception. To the
south-east
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of the second map is a
harbor
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with many boats to carry freights and passengers.
In addition
, the beach next to the accommodation has been extended to become a safe swimming place. The length of the
island
is still 100 metres, unchanged
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the past. Over time, the deserted has become a beautiful and attractive place to serve the entertainment and relaxation needs of human
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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