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Many people today would argue that cinemas are becoming irrelevant due to new streaming services. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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some people will argue today that streaming services will replace cinemas.I believe
this
 is not the case. Cinemas are
a
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great outing experiences ,streaming services are not gonna take their place anytime soon. People watch
movies
 for entertainment purposes and to take a break from their regular life. The experience of watching a
movie
 in the
cinema
 is far better than watching it at
home
.There
is
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are
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 no distractions
while
 you are in the
cinema
whereas
 at
home
 you cannot enjoy your
movie
 without any disturbance.
Moreover
 the video and sound quality are superior
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that
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what
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 are at
home
.
Also
, all the great
movies
 are released in the
cinema
 first and till the
time
 they are released on the platforms it becomes irrelevant nobody talks about the
movie
 anymore.
Movies
 are
also
 a good way of spending
time
 with your friends. Staying at
home
,all day long is boring. You get out to watch the
movies
, it gives you a different experience which
refersh
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refresh
 your mind and you spend quality
time
 with your friends. for ,example after working a full week when you go to watch a
movie
 on
friday
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night and have some dinner afterwards, it makes your weekend great . At ,
last
 I will conclude that watching
movies
 in the
cinema
are
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 far better for your mind. You get
achance
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a chance
to spend quality
time
 with your friends. Watching a
movie
 with your partner is still a great date so streaming services can never take place of
cinema
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