Some people prefer to shop in traditional stores. Other people prefer to do their shopping online. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the modern
world
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we have a
lot
of opportunities, which make our daily life easier. Some of them can allow us to save
time
for the most important things. We can use certain websites or apps for shopping online.
According to
that, we can buy
food
, clothes, tools, electronic devices or things for pets just
staying
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at home.
Moreover
, we
don’t
need to be at home and wait for our
goods
to be delivered. We decide and choose the right
time
when it will happen.
However
, there are a
lot
of
people
who
don’t
support that idea and want to shop by themselves. Despite the fact that a
lot
of us live in really comfortable conditions and we
also
have some
stores
nearby home and office, our life becomes very fast. We always need to rush, we
don’t
have enough
time
for our habits or family. The first
reason
for shopping online is to be willing to save
time
as much as possible.
For example
,
buying
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some
goods
online
while
having lunch at work, we can save a minimum of one or two hours and spend
this
time
walking with friends or children.
In contrast
, if we decide to go to traditional
stores
, we just waste our free
time
because of traffic
jam
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,
queues
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and queues
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in
stores
.
Also
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we can buy some extra
food
because of hunger after work. The second
reason
for shopping online is the possibility of buying a
lot
of different foreign
goods
. We
don’t
need to fly to other countries if we want medicine or cosmetics from Israel, bags or shoes from Italy and unusual
food
from China. We just need to download an app and have a bank account.
Such
an opportunity will allow
people
to buy any necessary
goods
, make an interesting gift, buy tickets for any concert, go on a trip or just buy
food
for a romantic dinner.
Nevertheless
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many
people
prefer traditional shopping. The first
reason
is the desire to see the product live, touch it and make your own choice. Even though delivery apps are responsible for the quality of the product, sometimes you don't get what you expected,
because
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and because
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of that,
people
just
don’t
trust online shopping. In my opinion, the second
reason
is just a habit. Many
people
like to go shopping, look for something new, try on clothes and think about every detail.
Moreover
, for many
people
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it is a kind of therapy and relaxation. In conclusion, buying
goods
online really provides many ways and solutions from the most mundane to the most unusual issues, it
also
gives
the
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us the
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opportunity to save
time
, which is very valuable and necessary for us. But there are
also
advantages to buying
goods
in traditional
stores
. We can always choose one or another option that suits us better, try to change our habits or stick to our principles.
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