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The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc.) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983.

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The table chart demonstrates
consumer
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durables
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 used by British people between 1972 and 1983. Television
used
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of
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 all times is the highest. It is slightly increased or mostly stable. Central heating is the least owned
consumer
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durables
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durable
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 until
dishwasher
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the dishwasher
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 comes in the chart in 1978. Central heating is showing an increase and
its
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it
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 almost doubles the percentages in a decade. Percentage of the video
consumer
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 is almost
the
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apply
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one
people
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person
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 every five in 1983.
Vacuum
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The vacuum
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 cleaner is the second highest ownership in all years. Refrigerator
usage
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 is highest in 1983 and its the same for washing
machine
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machines
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 too.
Least
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The least
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usage
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of
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apply
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in all years is dishwashers. As
the
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apply
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most of the others for telephone
usage
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pick
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picked
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 in 1983. In conclusion, almost in a decade
consumer
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durables
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usage
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 increased in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and
also
Linking Words
 more technology comes to the stage
usages
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usage
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 of
consumer
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durables
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 is increasing.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumer, durables, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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