Education is a critical element of the prosperity of any nation. The more educated the people of the country are, more successful their becomes. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

The phenomenon of evaluating the values or success of a person mostly depends on his
education
level in those days has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as
people
's views on
this
issue in question may be, I disagree that the view of receiving higher
education
equals higher achievement. Of all the reasons why educated
people
are not certain to have more success than others who are non-educated, probably the most significant one is that there are many different categories and factors to define a person who is successful or not.
For instance
, some
people
may earn less money, but they save many
people
who live in poor countries from disaster and famine. From another point of view,
this
is
also
a high accomplishment because not everyone can sacrifice their time and comfortable life to help others. Another reason that should not be overlooked is that spoon-feeding
education
is the most common method used by schools. To illustrate, those students who received spoon-feeding
education
and acquire a certification from university can only prove that they are good at memories of things.
For example
, in Hong Kong, most
people
have a high-salary job or succeed in some fields,
however
, they usually graduated from high school.
Therefore
, you take more
education
does not represent you have more chance to succeed. Under
this
line of thinking, it seems to me that there are too many definitions of success and the
education
they received has directly affected their ability to succeed. So, I disagree that more educated
people
will bring more benefits to them.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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