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Some people think that children should not be given toys as they distract them in their studies, whereas others believe that toys always help them in their education. discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #children #toys #studies #education
I was in different countries and there are a lot of
different
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 between them. And the main reason, in my opinion, is the culture, even religion. The most
colorful
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 place
is
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in
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 Turkey. They
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 in
Alah
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Allah
 (
in
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whole
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it’s
 the same God) and because of have more strict rules.
For example
,
clouthes
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clothes
. Girls in Europe or Russia can wear what they want
during
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in Turkey
it’s
 unbecoming, they must cover
complete
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their complete
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 body
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except
exsept
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except
eyes
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 or face.
It’s
conected behavier
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connected behaviour
 too and spread only
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 girls and women. They can’t talk with unfamiliar man
bacause
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because
it’s
 unseemly or go for a walk at
nights
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night
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 -
it’s
 revolting. But what about
man
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men
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, they have opportunities which in Russia seems not the done thing. They can have several
wifes
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wives
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, I can’t imagine that my
husbant
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husband
 has
another women
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another woman
other women
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,
its
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it's
it is
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 completely outrageous. I think Islam is
very
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a very
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 difficult religion for
europenian
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European
 understanding.
However
turks
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 have
over the top
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 hard
ruls
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rules
,
we
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but we
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 have
in
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them in
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 common too.
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