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Many High Street shops have gone out of business in recent years. Why do you think this has happened? Is it a positive or negative development?

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mostly people argue that high avenue stores make losses in their commerce.the reason behind the loss is the higher pricing of products compared to the local
market
.
this
 trend has both negative and positive results which
i
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 want to mention below. There are several reasons why the loss of the
street
market
 has a positive impact.
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 particular
low sale
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in
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,
street
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market
 gives benefits to the local
market
.,
furthermore
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 high
street
 shops not only help to buy goods at a lesser price but
also
 provide greater varieties which
aids
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 people to buy a product
according to
 their budget.
for example
 in a survey a conclusion comes up which shows most
the
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people are unable to
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shop in High
street
 shops because they charge extra .
thus
 due loss-making we might see increase in a local
market
. Despite
of
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the above arguments.I believe that there are some points to show negative development.
Firstly
,there are significant high society individuals ,
they
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 want extra ambience
as well as
 a plethora of amenities and which
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 unable to find at local markets.
secondly
,the quality offered in the high
street
 shops and
thus
 local
market
 goods are insufficient to compete with. In conclusion.
although
 you might save money at the local
market
but
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their products and services are unable to compete with high avenue stores
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