You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
table shows the underground railways in comparison
of
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the date opened, how long
of
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the route was, and
also
passengers per year in 6 cities, which are
London
, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles.
According to
this
table,
London
has got the oldest and yet, longest distance course of
underground
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the underground
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rail system. Paris has the second longest track , and Tokyo has the most crowded fence, even though they only have half
long
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of the line distance of
London
. in 1976, Washington DC, it is made 29
kilometers
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shorter
length
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in length
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than Tokyo.
furthermore
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it reduces about 10 times fewer people on the rails.
Although
, the shortest and
the
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quietest city is Kyto. Let's point out the newest underground fence, it is Los Angeles in 2001 ,which is 17
killometers
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kilometres
longer and
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more people than Kyoto. the avenue of the underground rail getting shorter until 1981.
To sum up
,
London
has the oldest history of
underground
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the underground
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pole
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and the longest line in 6 cities.
Also
,it gets longer distances from 1990 to 1927.
however
, since 1976, it has been started making less length than before for some reasons.
as a result
,it has got mostly fewer passengers per year.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words london with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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