The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2005 & 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2005 & 2010.  Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The following pie chart illustrates the online sales for retail sectors in Canada between the years 2005 and 2010.
Overall
, both charts were about the same with minor changes now and
then
. In 2005 the electronics and appliances part had the highest figures at 35%.
However
, in 2010 it dropped by 5% making it 30% in the length of 5 years .On the whole ,the graph had the most noticeable change was the home furnishing and food & beverages area .
Next,
for ,home-furnishing it fell to 15% from 25% in 2005.
However
, food and beverages had the exact opposite it was at 22% in 2005 and rocketed up to 32% in 2010 , the cause could be the fact that the world population increased not only in Canada but in the whole globe . Video games had a slight upward trend pushing it to 23% from 18% in 2005 mostly because of the fact that technology developed more in that time span.
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