The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the
proportion
of females and
males
working in different faculties of a renowned university in 2021.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
faculty
of engineering mostly hired male staff
while
the highest
proportion
of female employees was of the
faculty
of education. Regarding male staff, the highest
proportion
was in the engineering
faculty
at 85% which was approximately four times higher than the number for the
faculty
of education, which was the lowest at 25%. The second highest percentages of
males
were 62% in the
faculty
of science which was equal to the business
faculty
.
In contrast
,
while
most staffs of the engineering
faculty
were male, females were least employed in
this
faculty
at 18% which was only one-eight the number of
males
. Interestingly, 72% of the staff of the education
faculty
were female, making it the highest.
Conversely
, it was the same
faculty
that had the lowest
proportion
of
males
at 25%. The proportions of male and female employees of the
faculty
of medicine were slightly different at 50% and 49%, respectively.
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