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Some people think that renewable energy sources like solar and wind power should replace fossil fuels such as coal and gas as soon as possible. Others think we should continue to use fossil fuels while it is still cheap to do so. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Certain individuals believe, that it is better to utilize coal and
gas
 when it is not expensive,
however
,
other
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consider
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 that we should
use
 renewable
energy
 sources that come
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from nature
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nature
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naturally
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. It is better to
use
 wind or solar power to reduce
cardon
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carbon
emission
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emissions
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 and
prefent
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prevent
 global warming. I believe that reducing the percentage of fossil fuels will help us to prevent climate change. On the one hand, there are many reasons why mankind
use
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 fossil fuels
such
 as
gas
 and coal. One reason for
that is
 that
this natural products
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this natural product
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 are cheap and easy to
use
. For many years now people utilize nonrenewable
energy
 because they know how to work with it and they have been doing it for a long time.
Although
 they
undrstand
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understand
 that coal and
gas
 produce a lot of
cardon
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carbon
 emissions. The carbon footprint that they leave causes a significant impact on our environment.
On the other hand
, individuals should consider some new changes in
energy
 power. Using natural sources that can be renewable will make a good effect on our planet. Since
,
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 wind and sun do not produce any type of outpouring it will make the air we
breath
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 much cleaner. People who are leaving in big cities are more exposed to any type of lung disease because they
use
 a big amount of fossil fuels,
that
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 can cause severe damage to our health.
In addition
, it not only
impact
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 on
human
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the human
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 body
,
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 but
also
on
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the planet itself. Countries
such
 as
,
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 Denmark, Sweden and
other
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others
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 have
showen
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shown
 better immune
system
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systems
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 in people and tangible improvements in nature
,
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 since they have
low
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a low
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percentage
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percentages
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 of carbon
emission
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emissions
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. In conclusion,
although
 coal and
gas
is mostly
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use
 nowadays and
easy
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are easy
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 to comprehend and not expensive yet,
so
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we should consider some changes in
energy
 power. Renewable sources will only make our lives better
,
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 since
it
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they
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 will slow down
the
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global warming.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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