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Some people think that renewable energy sources like solar and wind power should replace fossil fuels such as coal and gas as soon as possible. Others think we should continue to use fossil fuels while it is still cheap to do so. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Certain individuals believe, that it is better to utilize coal and
gas
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 when it is not expensive,
however
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,
other
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others
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consider
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 that we should
use
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 renewable
energy
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 sources that come
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from nature
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nature
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naturally
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. It is better to
use
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 wind or solar power to reduce
cardon
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carbon
emission
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emissions
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 and
prefent
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prevent
 global warming. I believe that reducing the percentage of fossil fuels will help us to prevent climate change. On the one hand, there are many reasons why mankind
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use
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uses
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 fossil fuels
such
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 as
gas
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 and coal. One reason for
that is
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 that
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this natural products
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this natural product
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 are cheap and easy to
use
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. For many years now people utilize nonrenewable
energy
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 because they know how to work with it and they have been doing it for a long time.
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 they
undrstand
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understand
 that coal and
gas
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 produce a lot of
cardon
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carbon
 emissions. The carbon footprint that they leave causes a significant impact on our environment.
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, individuals should consider some new changes in
energy
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 power. Using natural sources that can be renewable will make a good effect on our planet. Since
,
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 wind and sun do not produce any type of outpouring it will make the air we
breath
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 much cleaner. People who are leaving in big cities are more exposed to any type of lung disease because they
use
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 a big amount of fossil fuels,
that
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 can cause severe damage to our health.
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, it not only
impact
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 on
human
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 body
,
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 but
also
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on
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the planet itself. Countries
such
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 as
,
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 Denmark, Sweden and
other
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others
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 have
showen
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shown
 better immune
system
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systems
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 in people and tangible improvements in nature
,
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 since they have
low
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a low
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percentage
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percentages
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 of carbon
emission
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emissions
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. In conclusion,
although
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 coal and
gas
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is mostly
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is mostly used
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use
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 nowadays and
easy
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are easy
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 to comprehend and not expensive yet,
so
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apply
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we should consider some changes in
energy
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 power. Renewable sources will only make our lives better
,
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 since
it
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they
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 will slow down
the
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global warming.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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