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Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness. To whant extent do you agree with this statement

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Money
 is an important aspect of
people
's
lives
. There is a general belief that being wealthy doesn't necessarily mean being happy.
Although
money
 can improve
people
's
lives
, I believe that
people
 who are not rich have equally happy
lives
 and
money
 is not determining factor for one's happiness.
To begin
 with, wealthy
people
 often lead unhappy
lives
. To become successful and wealthy, they often work long hours, which leads to stress and depression.
Moreover
, they spend very little or no time with their loved ones and socialising with friends which
damage
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 relationships and results in lonely and unhappy
lives
.
Secondly
, many
people
 who are not wealthy often are happier. They find happiness in small things
such
 as spending quality time with their family and friends or, doing their favourite hobbies.
However
, admittedly,
money
 plays an important role in
people
's
lives
 .Having enough
money
 reduces the stress of constantly trying to figure out how to meet ends.
Moreover
,
People
 can afford to work less and retire earlier.
To conclude
,
money
 is an important aspect of
people
's
lives
.
However
, it is believed by many that wealth is not an important factor in being happy.
Although
 it is important to have enough
money
 to support ourselves and others around us I believe, that happiness can be found in the simple things we do .Doing which doesn't require us to be wealthy.
Submitted by  Niamh Gal on

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