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The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates information about the three diverse categories of
people
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 who visited different places.
Overall
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 the highest percentage is related to cinema visited by individuals who were born in
Canada
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, and the lowest number of tourists belong to the theatre by new immigrants born in other
countries
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, that unpopular in that category.
To begin
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 with, the cinema is the most popular location among Canadian inhabitants. The data is 70℅
people
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 who were born in
Canada
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 and 65℅ related individuals born in English-speaking
countries
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 and 50% of
people
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 who were born in other
countries
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.
According to
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 the data,
Although
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 the other popular places were newer libraries and zoos, which include about 50% of
people
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 who immigrate to
Canada
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, the lowest visited related to
people
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 from all different categories, have less welcome to
this
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 place,20% of
people
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 born in
Canada
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, almost 20% for immigrate of English speaking
countries
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 to any person
people
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 born in
Canada
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. In sum, the most significant place that
people
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 greeting to them is the cinema and the second stage belongs to the library and zoo.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, canada, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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