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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Climate
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 is one of the most outstanding and serious problems in the world right now, some individuals believe that we should be adapting to it
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 of fighting it.
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 essay totally disagrees with
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 statement; I believe that it's a problem worth preventing. First of all,
climate
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 has already done some severe damage to our environment, Global warming is a good example, recently there have been a lot of scientific reports that claim that the earth's temperature is rising and
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, drought has increased and augmentation in temperature has been observed all over the world, there are,
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, other consequences to mention
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 as desertification and the shortage of potable water. Some governments have already established a plan of action to face some of
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 dangerous and growing outcomes.
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 we could find the appropriate mechanisms to deal with the current issues, there is no assurance that other problems may not appear in the future,
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, possibly there will be more unpredictable earthquakes and harder weather in the future which can cause casualties, these uncertainties make it even harder to cope with
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 changes;
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 , the government can still minimize
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 with the strict application of certain policies regarding the environment, some restrictions on the usage of fossil fuels would be a good start.
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, there are convincing arguments both for adapting to
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 and against it;
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, I believe that it would be best to continue our fight against it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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