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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant
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The bar charts compare the destinations of two groups of
students
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, namely
graduates
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 and
postgraduates
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 in the UK after they leave college in 2008.
Students
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 who decide to
work
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 full-time will not be mentioned in either graph.
It is clear that
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 by far the most popular choice for both groups of
students
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 is to continue their studies.
By contrast
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, only a relatively small number of
students
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 from them decide to
work
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 voluntarily after their graduation. Continuing to study is the top option for graduate
students
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 and
postgraduates
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, with numbers of approximately 30.000 and 3.000 respectively. Part-time jobs can be seen as their second choice.
Whereas
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 the discrepancy between "
Further
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 study" and "Part-time
work
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" is much larger for
graduates
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 than for
postgraduates
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. Only 17.735
graduates
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work
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 part-time, which is slightly over half of the number of
students
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 who decides to learn
further
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.
However
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,
this
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 difference can be negligible for
postgraduates
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. Voluntary
Work
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 is the least attractive destination for
graduates
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 and
postgraduates
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, with 3.500 and 345
students
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 respectively. And, both groups see a large number of
students
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 who cannot find a job after leaving university.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, graduates, postgraduates, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • full-time work
  • graduate
  • postgraduate
  • trends
  • part-time work
  • further study
  • gap year
  • traveling
  • unemployment
  • percentages
  • proportion
  • significant differences
  • subsequent activities
  • career progression
  • academic advancement
  • job market
  • vocational training
  • data interpretation
  • employment sector
  • career-oriented steps
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