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Exposure to international media, such as films, TV and magazines, has an impact on the local culture. What do you think of these impacts? Do you think that the advantages of these impacts outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the past, local
cutures
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cultures
culture
 like regional music or dance were enjoyed by the public, as well efforts were made to preserve them.
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exposure to the
media
, films, television shows and magazines from around the Globe has started affecting the local
culture
. I my opinion these unnecessary factors are leading to detrimental effects on the local
culture
. In
this
 essay, I will argue that there are more disadvantages than advantages. To start with, people are more interested in knowing the wear
abouts
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about
 of international celebrities rather than taking interest in
thier
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their
 regional events. One paramount factor is easy
access
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 to the internet everywhere and
it's
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 addictive nature.The significant impact of
this
 can be observed in the field of tourism.
For instance
,
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cities like Rajasthan and Jaipur which are among the most famous places known for their
culture
 and heritage are no longer attached to their roots and old traditions
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Social
media
 and TV.
This
 led to
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 effect on the tourism industry as the places are losing
thier
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their
 authenticity. On
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top
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,
due to
 increased exposure to international films and music, youngsters are more into speaking foreign languages like English. Local languages are slowly getting vanished
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 all major cities. To illustrate more majority of corporate companies demand fluency in English over Regional languages like Hindi and Marathi. Despite
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all the negatives, exposure to international
media
 has opened doors to several opportunities for youngsters and increased
glocalisation
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 of products. To recapitulate, international
media
 has
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 own benefits provided that their use is limited to a certain extent for intellectual purposes without ignoring our rich local
culture
 and heritage.
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