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With the advances in science and technology, people from different ends of the world can communicate with each other. What is your opinion on the impact of technologies on our lives? Do you think that these advances only result in positive outcomes?

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In
this
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 sophisticated era, human activities are eased by the existence of
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. I believe that
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this
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 phenomenon could bring a positive impact, it
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 brings negative effects on
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’s activities.
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, it cannot be doubted that
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 is a marvel of human ingenuity which could assist
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 in communication. Using
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,
people
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 could communicate with their significant others in different locations easily. A case in point is
people
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 who are already married, in the past,
people
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 used to send letters to communicate with their partners which
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time
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 and
energy consuming
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, but with the advancement of
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technologies
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, they could communicate easily without considering the
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 and energy that they need to spend.
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, with the existence of
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,
people
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 could communicate with their partners easily.
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,
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technology
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 could bring
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 impact, it could
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 bring drawbacks to
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’s lives.
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,
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 have
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 predisposition to isolate themselves since they could do their work in their own rooms.
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,
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 who use computers to work tend to spend the majority of their
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 on their
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 and lack interaction with their surroundings.
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, there is a chance for
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 to gain weight. With the advancement of
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, a sedentary lifestyle cannot be avoided, so the tendency for
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 to glue to their
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 increases.
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,
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 will lack exercise which will lead them to be more obese. In conclusion, even though
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 have brought
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merit into
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 activity
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 as ease
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 communication, they could
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 bring demerits
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 as lack of interaction and the possibility to gain weight. Given
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people
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to
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maintain the
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 that they spend
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using
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.
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