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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018
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The given bar chart illustrates information about how average families in a particular country spent their weekly income in two different years 1968 and 2018. It can be clearly seen that
while
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 spending for
food
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, fuel and power, clothing and
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footwear
footware
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footwear
, and personal
goods
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 declined, the opposite was true for the remaining categories, with only household
goods
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 unchanged. Another noteworthy observation is that spending on
food
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 was by far the most common in 1968, by 2018 leisure occupied the majority of the family budget, followed closely by housing. In 1968, families spent on average 35% of their weekly income on
food
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, greatly outweighing other budgetary concerns, each of which represented between 5% and 10%. Among these, fuel and power
was
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were
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 the lowest at 6%. In 2018, household expenditure for leisure and housing had a significant increase,
reach
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reaching
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 about 22% and 18% respectively,
overtaken
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overtaking
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food
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expense
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expenses
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. Transport
also
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 showed a notable growth (
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an increased
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increased
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increase
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7
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of 7
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%). Fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
,
personal
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and personal
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goods
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 all declined
about
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by about
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 5%. Household
goods
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was
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were
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 the only one
remained
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that remained
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, at 7%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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