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Some people think the most important thing for nurses is to have strong medical knowledge, but others believe other qualities for nurses are still important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #nurses #qualities
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 their job.
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, they should be
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educated
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abillities
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abilities
. Now it will be more important when your customer is a sick man. He or she needs a person that
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understands
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also
cure
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gentel
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. The
comunity
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community
that
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think nurses should be a high
knowledable
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knowledgeable
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the
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abilities
are
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important
, I think that they forget you need a nice and kind voice when you are in pain. Like when you are a kid and you
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, you always needed your mother's hug and it made you
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 down. But
also
, there is another insight that
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said that if nurses
be
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gentel
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gentle
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the pationt
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pationt
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patient
.
It's look
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 like that you have
stomakace
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stomachache
 and go to the hospital and the medical team just
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 and
tell
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 you some nice
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, you will be
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of
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 after some minutes because you need treatment and
some thing
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 for your pain.
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end
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thik
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think
, nurses have
very
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dificult
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difficult
job
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jobs
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. They should have soft skills like listening, caring,
understanding
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and understanding
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 and
also
prfasional
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professional
 medical skill like being fast, managing stressful
sitioation
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situations
situation
 and following the treatment. In
short
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world
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 they should be superman.
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