The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates four destinations(zoo,library,theatre and

cinemas

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) visited by three subgroups of Canadians namely,new migrants born in non - English speaking territories outside Canada,Born in Canada and migrants from English-speaking countries. Looking from an

overall

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perspective, it is readily apparent that English-speaking migrants and natives enjoyed attending

cinemas

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theatres

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,and zoos where recreational activities are possible.

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,people from non-English speaking areas attended libraries most

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Cinemas

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, were popular among native Canadians accounting for 70% of the total number,being the majority of visitors .

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theatres

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and zoos attracted more visitors who were non-Canadian English speakers compared to the other two categories , around 30% and 50% respectively. 50% of visitors to cinema comprised individuals from-non English- speaking territories and only 10% of them participated in

theatres

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as the least involved destination.

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individuals from non -English speaking areas, were lagging behind in attending

cinemas

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theatres

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and zoos ( 50%,10% and just above 30% respectively),they recorded the highest proportion in attending libraries.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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