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Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to guarantee a good job, others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
While
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 some people believe getting
certificate
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a certificate
the certificate
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 from
university
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a university
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 is
the
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a
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worth
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 method to ensure a
high quality
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high-quality
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 career,
other
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others
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 argue working and
gain
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gaining
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 some experience would be
a
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the
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 right way. The essay will contain information that
support
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supports
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 both
opinion
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opinions
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.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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at
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with
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, some companies focus on application education background
especially
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,especially
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 on the name of
university
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the university
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 that you graduated
.
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from.
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 If you study in
unknown
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an unknown
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 place, you would be rejected. The degree
also
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help
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helps
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 to guarantee your
knowlegde
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knowledge
 and skill if you have no experience.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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,experience is
also
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 important because it told how
master
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masterful
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 you are in your job.
Conclusion
In my opinion,
Degree
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a Degree
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 from
university
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a university
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 is significant or not
it
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apply
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depend
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depends
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 on three factors which are
company
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a company
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 that you want and
career
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the career
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 that you are
.
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in.
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 First is the policy of
company
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the company
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 that you would like to work at if the company need
drgee
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drugs
. Second is
career
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a career
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 that you are or would like you would like to be if you are
doctor
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a doctor
the doctor
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 and you
has
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have
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 no dree , no one
trust
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trusts
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 you to clue them.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • higher education
  • specialized fields
  • job prospects
  • earning potential
  • formal education
  • networking opportunities
  • career advancement
  • practical skills
  • work environment
  • financial independence
  • high costs
  • skills and experience
  • formal education
  • prioritize
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