The maps below show how the town of Harborne changes from 1936 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given two maps illustrate a number of changes in the town of Harborne from 1936 to 2007.
Overall
, it can be seen that Harborne has totally transformed in a number of different ways. In addition
, the most noticeable is the appearance of a new place for residents in 2007.
In the centre of the town, there were a lot of renovations. First of all, the sweet shop and the butchers were demolished and replaced by a big supermarket. Next,
the unused space in 1936, which was in the middle, was transformed into a large shopping centre in 2007. Besides
, the flower shop was destroyed to make way for a travel agent.
The forest, which was to the Northwest of the town, was reduced in size. Moreover
, in the Northeast, the residential area was built on the original site of the river. Go to the Eastsouth side,the golf course and the museum were constructed to replace the farmland and the government offices, respectively. Finally
, the cycle path was converted into a road.Submitted by mandupao on
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