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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

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The most effective
way
 for a
child
 to develop their skills and creativity is
doing
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by doing
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 an activity with enjoyment rather than reading. I firmly agree with
this
 because through doing an activity a
child
 can explore the practical ways of accomplishing a
task
.
Also
, it improves their thought
process
.
Firstly
,
while
 the method of doing a
task
 is read to a
child
, he can only utilize his
imaginery
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imaginary
 power. But doing it practically with a
child
 in a friendly environment can help him to explore the
process
 in
details
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detail
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.
Besides
, if some difficulties arise during the accomplishment, children can get the chance to learn how to deal with
unfavourable
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the unfavourable
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situation
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situations
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.
Thus
,
offsprings
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offspring
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 can get the confidence for facing any new challenge in the future. For
an
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apply
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example, in Dubai, they design their classes in
such
 a
way
where
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that
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 students have to attend 80% of experimental activities and 20% of
theoritical
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theoretical
lecture
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lectures
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.
As a result
, their students are doing great in
professional
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the professional
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 sector compared to others.
Secondly
, in a
textbook
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,textbook
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 one or two
process
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processes
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 can be written for a
task
.
However
, in
real
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the real
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 world ,
while
 doing something, a
child
 can explore as many ways as possible which helps them to think out of the box.
Apart from
this
, when a
child
 can get a chance to do something independently, they can try different ways and find out the best possible solution
by
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on
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 their own.
Consequently
 , it boosts their creativity and can make their own
process
 for a job.
For example
, In developed countries, children are given a
task
 with
time
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a time
the time
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 limit and they have to perform
individually
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it individually
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. In
this
way
, it helps them to think
out
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outside
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 of the box and
make
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makes
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 them unique with their own ideas.
To sum up
, a
child
 needs to explore new tasks in
such
 a
way
where
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that
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 they can enjoy the whole
process
while
 doing. Reading can not improve skills and creativity for accomplishing the
task
.
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